my first doom comic-kinda sad...

[a_demonic_lemon]

i made this because i was bored
for some reason you have to save it then open it in paint to read what hes saying
http://img516.imageshack.us/img516/4223/comicap7.png

[Nomad]

That was really dumb.

[rustyslacker]

It was sad. :( :( :(

[Illdo]

So stupid that funny.

[rustyslacker]

Not really.

[Giftmacher]

It's kind of... not good.

[Dutch Devil]

You need help.

[a_demonic_lemon]

its my first comic, its bound to be not exprienced work

[Nomad]

We're more commenting on the content, not the actual craftsmanship. Hire better writers.

[a_demonic_lemon]

heres another

http://img473.imageshack.us/img473/3548/comic2jz5.png

[a_demonic_lemon]

and another

http://img249.imageshack.us/img249/8510/comic3gh8.png

[Nomad]

Hire better writers.

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[a_demonic_lemon]

and another

http://img116.imageshack.us/img116/6023/comic4wc6.png

[Giftmacher]

Nope. Nothing. Listen to Nomad.

[rustyslacker]

That was weak.

[JohnnyRancid]

Yeah, their a little lame. Did these make you laugh as you were making them?

[blood imp]

I must say that the last one (Mask of Power) was horrible. The other ones were also weak. The concepts are rather silly. Speaking of comics, I wonder what happened to that Make Your Own Meat thread.

[lucius octavion]

You make the doom guy look like he cuts himself.

[a_demonic_lemon]

ok wat do i need for a good comic

[Nomad]

A sense of humor.

[Giftmacher]

And you should actually put some effort into your backgrounds too.

I made this in maybe three or four minutes, it's not that hard.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v470/dayghne/Eman/BackgroundDoom.png

[rustyslacker]

And you should actually put some effort into your backgrounds too.
Even with good art, the dialogue would still suck.

[ace]

Not involving suicide would be a start. Believe it or not, most people don't enjoy reading about someone killing themselves over trivial (read: emo) things such as girlfriend issues, etc.

Also it should be added to those who have said it's not funny that nowhere in this thread has he said that it's intended to be funny. That's not to say that this would be good as a comic to be taken seriously either.

Though if it is intended to be funny, I'd suggest not becoming any form of comedian.

[Giftmacher]

Even with good art, the dialogue would still suck.
But good dialogue would still be bogged down by a plain white background. It's like orcs and humans. You can't have one without the other.

[FATAL]

Rusty reads dinosaur comics D:|

[rustyslacker]

But good dialogue would still be bogged down by a plain white background. It's like orcs and humans. You can't have one without the other.

Rusty reads dinosaur comics D:|
Yeah. I'd rather see thoughtful dialogue and shitty art, than the converse.

Luckily, the comics in this thread have bad art and bad dialogue.

[Phoebus]

ok wat do i need for a good comic*rant* That's up to you, really. It depends on your reason for doing it in the first place. The criticisms in this thread may seem harsh, but maybe that's what you need right now. Don't do something just to do it. If you can't come up with anything, that's probably a good sign. The viewers here enjoy and encourage real creativity, or at least a good, honest attempt. Until you consistently post uninspired, pointless crap, which we detect easily and have little patience for.

[a_demonic_lemon]

ok thanks ill try somthing else

[blood imp]

I'm looking forward to it! On the topic of comics (second time I've said that...), Flipside wins.

[a_demonic_lemon]

is this a start?
http://img172.imageshack.us/img172/7580/comic5fb1.png
tell me wat i could improve

[Nomad]

If you are going to write it in English, perhaps you should learn the language a little better.

[Giftmacher]

If he's what?

Anyway, an improvement I guess.

[a_demonic_lemon]

If he's what?

Anyway, an improvement I guess.
he says hes dosent love him and hes damned if he is*troll*

[Nomad]

If you are going to write it in English, perhaps you should learn the language a little better.

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[Illdo]

Okay... it's the first panel right?

How about you include speech bubbles instead of printing the text like this?

[a_demonic_lemon]

ok, any other suggestions

[Giftmacher]

Give it a point.

[a_demonic_lemon]

ok anything to write ABOUT

[FATAL]

Write stories about the demon invasion on the demons' perspective. A bit like Concerned showed the combine side of things of Half Life 2 quite humorously. For a specific example, you could tell how the barons ended up in the small coffins in E1M8. The games are full of silly things that you shouldn't run out of material very quickly, and even then, you could just as well make some totally unrelated stories.

[a_demonic_lemon]

the most effort into my doom comics so far

http://img507.imageshack.us/img507/1462/comic6el5.png

[Nomad]

Don't quit your day job.

[a_demonic_lemon]

so your saying my last comic was a good one?

[Nomad]

Quite the contrary. I think you should seek some other area of expertise. I don't think that comics are your calling, to put it lightly.

[Illdo]

You totally fail, Lemon. what with all the profanity. There's a certain Doom community on the Web that would find it amusing. But it;s not this one.

[jake250]

The immaturity is glaring.

Thats the kind of things I liked when I was 10 years old...

Not trying to offend you, but that kind of humor, constant speak about suicide and profanity, if thats all you like and think is worth posting here as "comics", you should seek help.

Grow up and come back later... with some thoughts put into your works...

[FATAL]

wat That's horrible

[blood imp]

http://img507.imageshack.us/img507/1462/comic6el5.png
The background is acceptable. However, you may want to use actual bubbles (that is, make them roundish with non-underlined text).

Also, your sense of humor (if that's what you call it) is horrible. Sexual humor is much more funny if it is suggestive and not pure garbage like "i wana sukk ur cock lololol".

Generally, comics about suicide, profanity, and descriptions of sex are stupid. And it would help if you spell better, use proper grammar, and use correct punctuation (yes, this includes apostrophes).

Going back to text bubbles, if you don't feel like using round ones, don't, but at least leave some white space between the words and pictures.

[a_demonic_lemon]

yep ill find somthing else to make- my comics suck

[Illdo]

my comics suck
WOW! We've had a breakthrough! You get a gold star.

[Giftmacher]

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v470/dayghne/Eman/Twink-LET-its4.jpg
No, he gets a bannana th-ticker!

[reptie7]

That comic is highly retarded.Please kill yourself and stop polluting the forums...........

[jake250]

That comic is highly retarded.Please kill yourself and stop polluting the forums...........
Look who's talking.

I just noticed you got banned... no wonder why.

[Giftmacher]

Haha, you're awesome. :D