Prog metal intro thing

[Harry]

One day I decided to make some kind of hardcore drop C metal tune, so I did.

This is very early WIP, and everything done by me (including the roar, lol)

http://media.putfile.com/RAWR-58-44

[rustyslacker]

This is a pretty cool song! *thumbs*

The harmonization is good. It could help to just take out the scream. It doesn't do anything for the music.

[Harry]

It could help to just take out the scream. It doesn't do anything for the music.

It sounds rather plain without it, imo it adds a sort of 'dramatic' effect effect, like in 'the Heretic Anthem' by Slipknot, thats badass :p

Maybe its a bit too blatent..I'll see when it comes to making the verse.

[rustyslacker]

Keep us posted. It sounds good already. ;)

[Nomad]

Slipknot sux, and dropped tuning sux. Tune in C# like a real man.

That said, it's not bad. The drums kind of suck, but I don't expect much from someone who doesn't really drum themselves. The second synth part drowns out the rest of the music as well. That harmonization part is really awesome, though. Do more of that.

[lucius octavion]

Harry, you are one talented dude. You really are.

Here's some things I think would make your song even better, even if it is early WIP.

Man, what I think you should do... is draw out your roar a little more and change the shape of your mouth as your as you are doing this. Then maybe layer it over a deeper kind of growl to make it sound less wimpy.

The drums are alright. They seemed a bit tinny or something.


Now for the guitar, the mid section almost sounded like whining music compared to the riff you were playing in the beginning. The riff had really good tone to it and the mid section didn't fit exactly right. Maybe change that part to get an overall better tone. You should also add a lead guitar part because the rhythm guitar is riffin.

Now there is one thing that is missing. A good bass part. The bass in this type of song gives it that "sick" feel.

But over all you have made a pretty nice song. You're pretty good at a lot of stuff.

[Harry]

Man, what I think you should do... is draw out your roar a little more and change the shape of your mouth as your as you are doing this. Then maybe layer it over a deeper kind of growl to make it sound less wimpy.
Thanks, I'll keep that in mind, I only did about 2 takes of that one, so as not to scare my mum, lol.

The drums are alright. They seemed a bit tinny or something.

The drums atm are sort of a placeholder because there are too many fills/ beats to choose from. I'll have to maybe get some new bass drum sounds, because the EZdrummer ones sound really bad.

Now for the guitar, the mid section almost sounded like whining music compared to the riff you were playing in the beginning. The riff had really good tone to it and the mid section didn't fit exactly right. Maybe change that part to get an overall better tone. You should also add a lead guitar part because the rhythm guitar is riffin.

Now there is one thing that is missing. A good bass part. The bass in this type of song gives it that "sick" feel.


I really want to keep the sort of clean guitar bit, when I get round to borrowing someones bass, and recording a third, lower guitar part it should have a much bigger sound, sadly I'm extremely bad at bass*ugh*

Thanks for the helpful comments :)